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Re: Dark Night
Well, this was a promising start for a short story. I think that it is right to set up a strong scene first, which you did, in order to grab our attention. What i wanted, more of this, was a more descriptive and emotional narration, with pictures and flavours of the scenery. You know, the night is a great concept and always gives us the appropriate images and words to create the proper atmosphere.
Anyway, your story seems to be just a scene and not a part, the introduction to the main plot. It seems great for a movie trailer, if you know what i mean, but it does not give the reader a clue about what is going on and what is going to happen next. In my opinion you could work on that scene, starting from the characters, in order to develop it.
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