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Old 07-04-2008, 11:58 PM
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Re: Demon Hunter

A good story! I like very much your characters! Your narration enlights the scenery you have created and set very well. Very good action writing, could be a screenplay as well. Now comes the difficult part! Your story does not have the spark of a new aspect of the demon story traditional concept. Intellectual demons perhaps? Well, this is interesting i must say, but i need a strong plot built around them in order to convince me about their powers and how they came here. I need a little more fantasy writing in your story, is what i mean.
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