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Old 08-04-2008, 09:14 AM
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Re: The Worst Fable of All Time

Wow. I liked the breaking the fourth wall humor that you used. Very funny. One mistake,

Quote:
The next day at school, the girl of his dreams, opened her locker, as she did every morning before class.
Get rid of the comma after "the girl of his dreams".
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