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Re: The Worst Fable of All Time
Wow. I liked the breaking the fourth wall humor that you used. Very funny. One mistake,
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The next day at school, the girl of his dreams, opened her locker, as she did every morning before class.
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Get rid of the comma after "the girl of his dreams".
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According to Dante's Divine Comedy, Flatterers are condemned to the Eigth Circle of Hell.
Ah crap.
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