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Re: In The Streets of Harlem - Prologue
What about…In the eyes’ of others, they were a ‘gang.’ ?
Maybe…they seemed twice the number they actually were. ? Or is it doubled?
What about saying…He licked (at) his cracked, flaky lips trying to swallow the lump in his throat. ?
What about…It was (at) that moment, right there that (this) would define his future, ?
A question…are not members of a gang, usually young boys who possibly grow to be men?
To make it more personal, He was second-in-command to (their) leader. ?
I personally wanted more to the ‘fight/initiation’ scene. Also this man dying on the floor, are you going to give more details later?
I will give the Prologue a 2/5!
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