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The wicker loveseat he lounged in, scrounged from a dumpster in nearby Phoenix Bay, protested like a talkative cat as he settled into it.
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That's by far the best simile I've come across in a long time.
On a more critical note, I feel your uses of the word 'alien' in the first couple of lines are a bit generic and don't really show the reader what you mean, at least I found it to be that way. Are we supposed to see silver flying saucers and little green men? This becomes clearer later on but you might want to be a bit more imaginative with the initial descriptions.
I love how dangerous and efficiently the CESR-1088/e operates. I was a bit curious as to why it was wolf-shaped when it was of alien origin, did I miss something? In my mind I decided it was because CESR was specifically designed for use on Earth.
Wonderfully written and very engaging all in all.