[-Jim-]

Very cool story so far, ea. I must say that I'm not a huge fan of science fiction writing, but the way you write isn't like typical science fiction. You involve your reader a great deal in your style which give your writing style a uniqueness that I haven't seen before. From what I've read of you, doesn't matter what it is, it is easy to get involved with the story and loose yourself in the environment.

You have a very easy and mellow writing style, it's comfortable for the reader and that is very important, especially when writing about the fantastic.

I really didn't see anything that stuck out, I think others may have pointed those things out to you and you fixed it up. A very cool story so I'm gonna move right along to the next part. Excellent work here, ea.