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Old 02-09-2009, 09:11 AM
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Re: Turpentine

Very haunting. Had to read it a couple times before I felt like I was getting the imagery I should, but I think that's me not you.

I like the cadence change, that was a subtle touch but added a lot, in my opinion.

Every time I read it I find myself trying to stick a comma after "nails pressed just so" at the very end. Just the way it reads to me ...

I really like this one ...
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