Nice job Stories. You've just about got it. Just a couple of minor things and this will be a perfect sonnet. First,this line is a syllabel short.
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Your soft touch and everything you do
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Can be quickly fixed by placing "that" between everything and you.
Second This line is 3 sylllabels too long :
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I'll love you into eternity, with all my heart,
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Here is a suggestion. "I'll love you forever with all my heart " It doesn't have the punch to it that the yours had but it fits the criteria.
Oh and maybe a comma between now and this in the last line.
Hope that helps. This is coming along to be a really fine poem and I like watching a work in progress by a talent like you. Keep it up.