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Old 29-03-2006, 09:14 AM
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Re: My Sweetheart

Your style is really easy to read and clear.
Frankly the concept didnt seem particulary new to me, so the general feeling after reading "My Sweetheart" was almost as if I had heard it before somewhere - from a friend perhaps, or in a soap. Thats the only thing i dislike about it. The charecterisation is pretty good, there was a feeling of "knowing" the characters after reading it. The way you intertwined bits of past and present was just perfect, there is a constant feeling of "where will it go next".
And frankly i dont have anything against the length, because i never got to that point of reading something but not taking it in due to your relatively simple language and presentation.
keep it up
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