[Odanion]

I like this piece of work, it was nice to read...although against some of the replies above

The shoulder pain could be because he was using a different gun, as he said it surprised him, so I doubt he was using his own gun

the heart pounding would definetly come from adrenaline...and you would have to be either a psychopath or a cold hearted killer not to get that, not just some hit man, they usually have some kind of counsciousness of what they are doing

Other than what I mentioned I do not see anything wrong with the story (meaning I cant seem to find anything wrong with it at all :p ) Like so many other people are saying, I want to see updates...I want to see this hitmans next hits...I want to see if his counsciousness catches up with him...I want to know if he becomes a cold hearted killer or does he start to sympathise with the people he has to kill...update more and I asure you I will be reading it, and ofc ready to point out each and everything that needs to improve (in my eyes) so that you can make it better and better.


P.S. Hitman like stories/movies etc. may get done a lot, but that does not mean you should stop or whatever, no that means you need to keep going to make it better and better