[ManthaStoirmeil]

It's a good premise for a children's story, aqnd if you found a good illustrator, especially one that got the angle of vision from the child's-eye height for some of it, it could be very engaging. Certainly there are plenty of children who have these experiences (I'm a teacher in New York, and more than half my students are immigrants or the children of immigrants), and plenty more who don't, but would be richer for knowing about what happens to other kids in the world.

I agree with the comments that have been made here. This can stand to be longer and have more images in it -- all the senses, not just vision. It would make a nice picture book. You will have limits with the length of a picture book, so I think you would need to pick, say, eight or ten "scenes" that you develop text around, like little episodes, that make a story arc from there (India) to here (America). You have the seeds of a good one in the Statue of Liberty image.

ejenk21 has a good question -- why is the biblical quotation so important to the child that it is burned into her mind? I'm not saying it's not important -- but it is kind of hanging there and does not develop into anything. Kid stories need things to make sense.

I hope you do write this more fully. You have the emotional awareness to really make it sing, since it is your story.