Thread: John Meets God
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Old 19-02-2007, 05:02 AM
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Re: John Meets God

Pretty good concept. Could have used some more dialogue work, such as instead of simply accepting that God was "peeing" next to him and was going to incresase his penis size in return for asking that he reduce his marijuana ingestion (for an unnamed reason, might I add), John could have wondered why the bathroom, or asked any of the billions of questions that are in all of our heads when the man upstairs comes into mind.
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