Well, well, it was interesting. To me anyways, there isn't really a beginning, just a fragment. Why? Well, the heartless character changed without reason, just because something came over him, without reason. Character building, man, is misssing mostly.
As for this, I think words are missing:
Quote:
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"...I am (not) letting (you) come with me out of pity, but if you ever take another swing at me I will not hesitate to send you to join your friends and family."
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