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Re: My Lilli
Ah...don't you just love my almost unkown presence. I understand greatly what you are saying phonoho. It does get jarring but because the syllable count (that's what you see dwindling) and rhyming are very confined you must be a great poet to do this poem correctly, which I really wasn't trying for on this. I think that the first and last three couplets flow well but not the rest. It's called Exclamatory, if you were wondering, because in math a number exclamatory equals the sum of a number and all the numbers between it and zero, like that the poem dwindles in syllable count from whatever you choose. The poem doesn't have to rhyme but I like rhyming poems.
Thank you for your critique,
Simeon
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