I LOVE the content. It's a beautiful expression of love. I think it shows a maturing devotion, rather than the shallow "she's so pretty, I'm infatuated" type of thing I see so often. I agree with Phonoho; it sometimes seems stilted, like the rhythm is forced. Honestly, though, the content makes up for it.
Quote:
I'm less and less in love with love and more in love with her.
I'm in love with who she is and not with who we were.
First of all I love my God and he gave her to me.
I've been given care of her. My joy's when she's happy.
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I adore the first and third lines, the first because it flows so well and the cadence it fantastic, the third because I like (and agree with) the message. I read this poem out loud, and it really does flow well.
In short, wonderful! It's powerful, too. A great poem.