[Sime Sheef]

I liked it, though I had to reread parts with unlcear discriptors. An example of an unclear descriptor: "A phantom kiss". It's not explaned in the poem exactly what this means. Often, unclear descriptors make sense to me after rereading them, but sometimes, like the example, since they are never used the same in speech, their meanings are unclear. I like "A phantom kiss"; it's new and sounds cool and it's your poetic licence to use it, but since I don't understand it, it leads me to think you don't either, though you probably do.

I loved the first line of each stanza. Each one had a memory to fit it. I especially loved the line "Lack of air, an unquenched taste" because it's almost a paradox; one I understand completely. Great job Corneac.

Simeon