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Re: A Wake
It is humorous. My sainted father would have loved it, who called his wife "widder-woman" whenever he had a cold.
In verse 5, you have dangled a participle. I know almost everyone does it nowadays, and it's like trying to hold back an ocean full of Normans, but it's a technical error. "And having not a bath or swim" has to refer to the subject of the following clause -- not the flies, but the poor man himself. Maybe: "Not having had a bath or swim / he found the flies adoring him." Or some such.
But it's great -- actually sounds like the kind of thing that could happen in some village somewhere.
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