[Nephilim]

interesting writing style. i liked the story, even tho it read more as a summary. i dont quite think it belongs in the action/adventure story, since there was not much of either. but the introspective look at a soldier was entertaining and enlightening. also, your mastery of military lexicon was more than impressive. didnt know anyone else was that obessed other than myself, so youre in good company. i agree with the repetitive comment, but not entirely. i think your sentences could use some variance. mentioning awkward, multisyllabic words more than once in a setting gives the narration a stifled feeling, breaking the fluidity that was otherwise present. you have a great memoir here. it needs work, not much, but just a little cleaning up. i can tell you enjoy writing in the detail and voice that you do, and i wish you the best of luck in the future.