[Jon%]

So you have the "I'm back from war" theme to start it off. The main purpose seems to be to convey that there was a soldier love/hate ratio of about 25/75. It also serves as a device that allows us to relive the Vietnam experience with you. Unfortunately, that part of the story reads like a "What I Did Last Summer" essay. I went here, I did this and that, I did this, I did that, and then I came home.

In my opinion, the story would be a lot more engaging if you went into detail on some of the experiences you had. The sniper section sounds like it has possibilities (i.e. I remember one day my unit was <trying to achieve some objective>. Before I even heard the shot, I felt sharp pain in my arm. "Sniper!" someone yelled. The sound led me to the source and even though the nerves in my arm screamed out in protest, I aimed my rifle and fired...) A couple of sequences like that fleshing out the middle and you have your action/adventure.