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Old 11-04-2007, 09:41 PM
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Re: Last Words

Its a good piece, but I think you should paint it more elaborately, less descriptively, and make the second half considerably darker than the first half. Right now, it sounds more like a description and lacks drama.

But, since you said this is a shortened version of a novel, I guess you afforded the above thorns in the side to present the work briefly.
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