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Old 31-08-2007, 10:23 AM
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Re: Creative Writing

Glad you guys liked it, thanks for the input. Some of it could have been a bit more clear; in the part SeaN brought up I was just trying not to be repetitive by saying "eyes" twice, but I guess my change didn't help, ha. And the hiding behind the legs bit: the child's hiding behind the real teacher's legs, thought that was easy to see, but that's just me
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