You should be consistent with "World" or "world" the format makes a difference in the delivery of the word.
Quote:
The whole World should bleed
every time a man drinks
and hits his wife
The World should bleed this night
as she is extremely despaired
to hang onto life.
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A possible change of words but the ideas are relatively the same...
I think also some additional insertions of semicolons and or commas would be appropriate.