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I like it! Here are some nitpicky things I noticed. In general, I might go back and pull an adjective from each paragraph, as I noticed you used quite a lot of them.

You wrote: "...her face hidden by a dark, almost black, green cowled robe that..."
Suggestion: It's kind of awkward to read "almost black" and then "green". I might reword it to something like "Green cowled robe so dark it was almost black..." or something to avoid the "black, green" thing.

You wrote: "...Slipping his helm off and dropping it to the floor with a silent grace..."
Suggestion: I'm not sure if "silent grace" is describing his movements to remove his helmet, or that he somehow dropped his helmet and it hit the ground silently.

You wrote: "...Dragging her long soft hair over his chest and face..."
Suggestion: "Dragging" seems to be a bit harsh of an adjective for the action, at least as I see it. It doesn't feel like a description of soft hair tickling over him, which is how I see what is happening.