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Old 05-09-2007, 12:58 PM
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Re: Three Wooden Crosses

Not too much to get excited about here. There's No real story arc and nothing that really makes me care about the characters. The whole time I was reading I was wondering how you were going to kill them off. That kept me going to the end.

A few random thoughts:
* Why would you talk to a travel agent to visit your parents?
* Proposing at a funeral?? What a sap.
* Weird ending. Run the dental records and CSI could find the fetus...
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