Wooh...this is amazing Bri. One of my favourites from you, it has more to it, more breadth...it's almost deeper. You have a skill for distilling poetry to few words so much, but this shows you can say even more with more words.
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Soiled with his seed, greedily released
Deep within my haunted dwelling
I call out to him "destroy me again"
That is all I've been taught to feel
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And you day I can carry a metaphor and a "feel" throghout. Pssh. this was amazing...the flawless deliverance of the “flowerbed”, from the petals wilting, the seeds, the ground. It's very intrinsic. I agree that perhaps you should rework the last stanza. But man! I love this...your description...especially the one I picked out. Where just...wow. Dramatic but oh so vivid. I loved it.
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and convicts with perfect diction,
Underdogs with good intentions
Amputees with stamp collections
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