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Old 06-09-2007, 12:15 AM
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Re: Three Wooden Crosses

Technically excellent! Very easy to read, very little awkwardness that is found in so many stories. It's tight! A couple things I noticed:

You wrote: "We're lost," she crumpled the map...
Suggestion: I think it out to be a period, not a comma. "We're lost." She crumpled the map...

You wrote: "...nothing stood as a testament to the validity of their assumption."
Suggestion: That seems awfully wordy to me, maybe unecessarily so.
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