Haunting, provacative. Another wonder from you-- and meaning hidden well enough that all ages can read and appreciate while the older or more experienced can decipher the actual meaning. An idea about the last stanza though-------perhaps reworking it to more match the rest of the poem.
Example.....
Quote:
The master of my barren garden,
Keeper to all that was virtuous
Held in key- a memory- of a painful promise
Captivated in a prison of torrential torment.
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Take it as you will. Use it if you wish. Edit the crap out of it if you must LOL
Love ya girl