[Timmay]

vivid would just about summarize it. it was very good. id agree, a bit too short to be a story (not really) but since it has poetic value (it is peotic, very much so) i would definitly conciter it as a poem, a a brief little fetishy desire (not making fun; i just have a terrible vocabulary)

great job. Im not sure about weightlessness tho. trust me, your weightless until you splatter against the cement.