Thread: I, Zombie
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Old 04-10-2007, 10:53 PM
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Re: I, Zombie

I don't know the number but this is a scene in a Friday the 13th movie. Even if I overlook that fact, the writing is not that good. The section that starts with "One Year Ago" would have been better in the beginning with a jump to the current time. Or you could have made it a memory of the gravedigger.

The flow and the feel of the narration has an uncomfortable feel to it. You should rework the prose to sound more natural.
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