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Old 06-10-2007, 09:38 AM
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Her breaths were short and quick; each one making her heart beat just a little bit faster.
(A possible rewrite of the comma to a semicolon.)

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Vodka
does not need capitalization?

Fantastic! Honestly a superb story.
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