Quote:
Made of lucious green,
Grass which quivered at the sight,
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Luscious is misspelled. ^.~
These two lines also don't flow as smoothly as the rest - they are almost missing some words which cut them unnaturally short.
Made of
a luscious
<insert a descriptive color for green perhaps? Like forest, or emerald?> green,
the? Grass which
then? quivered at the sight,
Just a few suggestions ^.^