Tim - Ye, a dude suggested, I broke up the stanzas to make it more readable. Seems to work
Lu - Hmm, so Should I edit, missing the "to"? Btw you were correct. In greek you use a "to" after "promise" every time.
Ryankia - Thanks for reading yet another piece of mine!
All - Thank you, for your comments and advice. (oof is that all? Did it sound like an Oscar speech?)