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Re: Along Came a Stranger - Part 1
The intro is probably the hardest thing in the world to write. It is for me anyway, the idea for a great story is there, now the problem is putting it into words and hooking a reader to make them stick around to know whats going to happen. I like your story, but as JirQUEST said, the first part of it is incredibly confusing, you have so many characters and it needs to be a bit more clear as to who is who and how they know each other. In my opinion your story got better the longer it continued. The last part with the killer was great! I would just suggest re-writing the first part and making it a bit clearer and easier for your readers to follow. Great job though!
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