I love it. I love the originality and your style-it's very very good.
Some ppl have trouble making longer poetic stories like this sound good-they tend 2 sound redundant-but you pull it off quite nicely!!
Also the names and their meanings-awesome job-it pays to do your homework
. And I'm fascinated with stories set in this time period.
The only thing that I would change is:
"It feasted on his limbs, engulfed his white limbs."
Maybe changing the 1st use of "limbs" 2 a different word so that it's not repeated.
Again very nice work. A definite fav of mine.