[jerH]

You've got a good character here in Nathon....this became a really tough read right at the end though. The dream sequence was rough....I feel like there's something there that I'm missing, and a little more clarity might make it more accessible. I kind of got the feeling this was written quickly, like the words just came pouring out. That's good, but I think it left you with a rough gem that could benefit from some polishing. Definitely good base material here though...look forward to reading more from you.