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Your dots look weird, strange spacing between them.
"keenly...waiting"
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Try reading it out aloud. Everytime you get to 3 dots, pause. Pretend it's a period (.)
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I would've perfered to see a series of three "thousand..."
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So would I, but I didn't have anything further to add to that sentence. However, next paragraph, you have "a thousand feet".