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Originally Posted by jerH
You've got a good character here in Nathon....this became a really tough read right at the end though. The dream sequence was rough....I feel like there's something there that I'm missing, and a little more clarity might make it more accessible. I kind of got the feeling this was written quickly, like the words just came pouring out. That's good, but I think it left you with a rough gem that could benefit from some polishing. Definitely good base material here though...look forward to reading more from you.
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Thanks...you're one of only a few people whom I've spoke to that've read my work in progress, and the only one who has commented on it. In a positive way at that, thanks. You're correct, the end I wrote around 5am on alot of caffeine, in a fever....then, crashed. The dream sequence doesnt mean much...it was only done to bring back the character from the liqour store...this story is probably going to take a fantasy/paranormal twist...Im working on this right now, the story as a whole that is. (I love Gibson as well....count zero, neuromancer, pattern recognition...only ones ive read by him...started spook county at a book store....then passed out in the chair. I didnt sleep the past days before, and was drinking quite a bit.) peace.
Postscript: I dont know why I just didnt PM you, since everyone is going to read this now. So why not just not submit this?