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Re: Nerdy Neddy the Bullfrog

Most excellent. I don't read much from the poetry submissions, but this one caught my eye because with a name like "Jeremy" the "Jeremiah was a bullfrog" comments were an inevitable part of my childhood. To this day I have a soft spot for the bullfrog, probably because the friends I still have from those days continue to call me that. It's better than "germ".

Anyway, I agree whole-heartedly. The pace was perfect and the rhymes never felt forced, which is often my greatest issue with the rhyming poems I do read. One question though, aside from the alliteration, why is Neddy "nerdy"? He seems more "lonely" to me....but I wouldn't change it
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