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Old 21-10-2007, 05:06 PM
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Re: I, Zombie

Haw haw! 2 minutes to midnight... Good song, good song. Wasted Years is better though.

Anyway, back to the story, The beginning of this was fantastic! I was really digging into it. The way that it flowed was very unique, even though you were missing a lot of detail that could have improved the story ten-fold.

Over all, good job, but like someone mentioned before, try to stray away from cliche things and possibly copyrighted names and labels.
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