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Old 22-10-2007, 03:52 AM
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Re: Mama Worries

Yay LH! And you thought this wasn't one of your better ones! I actually have to agree with storiesmaniac and say this is your best on the site. The yes does contribute to the strong voice of the the narrator (whoever 'I' is), the rhyme of lines 1 and 2 of each stanza helps bring it together, and overall it just a very nice, very controlled poem from you. Excellent work!
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