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Old 27-10-2007, 12:45 PM
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Re: The Water Goddess - Prologue

I love it. It kind of sounds like the mind set of feudal japan in the since that it is an island and they think that the people every where els are savages. It is a good set up for a story. Try and be more specific with the people, like say her or him instead of them they and every one. Nice going.

you should post the first chapter, it sounds like a book i would not mind reading.
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