[Vail]

I have probably said this way too much.. but I despise rhyming. At first, all I could think was... wow.. this rhyming is super forced. But then the poem is so long.. and it somehow all fits.. and I'm left thinking. Wow, I'm a dick. So.. yeah. On to the actual review.

Definitely a personal tale, as our many of the writes poets put to pen. You were baring an obviously younger you or someone you know. Strong emotions conveyed throughout. I thought it was 'funny' how you put the girls who don't eat. I know quite a few young ladies whom are here in Denver at the children's hospital for just that reason. There are quite a few of them actually. Meh, it just struck a chord... Umm.. it read well, as most rhyme-schemed poems do.. had a decent flow, your syllable count and line length only waiver a little here and there, and the work is long enough that it masks the few hiccups very well.

In my opinion this isn't exactly amateur verse poetry.. but I'm not an admin or an editor so I can't do anything about it.

Oh, one little 'cosmetic' error. Second to last stanza, second line: seamed should be seemed

Thanks for sharing.. pretty good effort. I think this goes a little deeper than "Emo" but that's just me.