[Jackson]

If I am to be honest, there was much that I did not really enjoy about this piece. Allow me to elaborate:

- To use 'merely fake' in regards to asking yourself if God is real didn't seem to fit to me. I think this is because if God didn't ( or doesn't) exist, then there is nothing mere about that.

- I also did not like the use of badness. It made it seem that you were trying too hard to rhyme.

- The poem didn't really flow well. Looking at these two lines: "Now I lay me down to sleep,
I pray my soul the lord will keep." and these two lines: "I lay here and ponder,
Why my mind wants to wander." They have two completely different rhythms. Not to say that every poem needs to have everything lined up perfectly in regards to rhythm, rather that it just did not work for this piece.

I did enjoy the premise behind the poem, though. As I have said before, questioning is always good. To me, this poem is down on its knees screaming for answers. That's powerful.