Great emotion in this piece, but I'm a little confused about your rhyming pattern. Seperating it into stanzas or keeping a consistant pattern (abcc, abac, etc.) would help the reader understand exactly where you're going. Now, the good stuff:
Quote:
So, give me the strength I need
And help my heart not to bleed
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So beautiful and innocent. Very poetic, but without trying too hard.
Overall, lovely job.