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Re: I Saw Her In The Garden
The story is too fast, slow down, describe more, pay attention to details, and most importantly, try to make an impact. Its not a movie that has abrupt change of scenes and suddenly moving from one thing to another. Tis is a written story, relax and write 
Hirak.
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Who has understood the meaning of time,
For time alone is a mirage of a kind.
For to find time, is a dream of Man,
To be a man, whom time shall find.
Hirak.
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