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Old 02-11-2007, 05:20 AM
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Re: Those Damned Americans

Pretty good. I chuckled a few times. I like the sly reference to the "44 virgins" promised to some who die for their "religion." That's good.

The dialoge was solid, but like the first two said. Maybe make the red narration a little... meaner, or at least more bold.
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