I liked the story. The problems I see are mechanical in nature. You have an over use of nouns. Once you establish something is yours or belonging to you, there is no need to keep hammering them in. Let me give you a few examples:
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As I sat at the small table in my one room cabin in the heart of the Olympic Mountains, the clock chimed 1 A.M. The fireplace emitted a warmth as the winter winds blew with a fury. Old man winter was reminding me that I better make sure my seaoned firewood was well tarped and tied down. Earlier this afternoon, I had torn my best flannel workshirt on a nail. I was doing my best to finish the sewing before I headed for bed, but I began to doze off.
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Let's just use that last sentence as an example. You could easily have said, "I was doing my best to finish the sewing before heading to bed, but began to doze off." I could have worded it differently, but wanted to keep your framing.
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Suddenly, the needle pricked my thumb and I jumped, as deep red blood flowed onto my palm. I turned up the oil lamp to examine my finger, and my shirt.
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I won't go through each paragraph, but hope you see what I am saying. When you try to remove the nouns, it is easier to naturally be more descriptive.