I really enjoyed this story Bluejay. I don't think much is wrong with this piece, however perhaps making it a script would fix peoples opinions about the details ect.
I don't think the world is all black and white, we don't need to write a story about the Devil and have him the typecast Satan depicted in the bible. That is the fun of writing, we don't need to follow guidelines and we get to use our imagination.
Your characters are funny and I really get a strong visualization of what expressions they are making by the way you formated it. Example:
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It turns out that the punishment isn’t eternal. People do have a chance to redeem themselves if they can have a change of heart and turn to Me.
So it was a lie, then?
A white lie… of sorts. Well, perhaps an exaggeration…
Ha! You… You… lied!
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Really nice short with a very quirky and good humour. I loved it.