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Re: Relentless Advance
well done! its had to believe this is your first linked haiku.
one thing, i might be destroying the main idea of the haiku, but punctuation would seperate your thoughts. like i said, it might destroy the haiku, but a nice comma here and there would get your point across.
Ok. i might be a moron as far as poety oes, or just a moron in general, but it was just my thought.
otherwise, terrific descriptions, etc. its hard to belive you can fit so much in so little
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