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Old 05-11-2007, 01:35 AM
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I liked what I read so far. You just need to watch your grammer, some sentences are a little wordy and can be confusing. Add more description to your characters friend and background or scenery to give a better picture of his surroundings. I like that the end leaves you thinking what was it a dream or a look back into his past etc.
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